17 March 2010 - 2:30 pm

Fiction flash: Panic ensues

So, I was settling down on the train to write last night, and was in a musing mood. It was one of those days when sensory information twists into words and phrases in my head, in readiness to be used in some scene or other.

Usually, I don’t bother to do anything with these little snippets of description, but I decided to throw them into a two-sentence story, mostly to see if I could. Here’s what I ended up with:

Panic Ensues

An empty train carriage, cool with humming fans and the faint smell of disinfectant, is quickly filled up with bodies and bags, papers and books, iPods and laptops shoehorned in tight enough for typing. As the doors squeeze closed, a woman lifts her handbag, turns to the man next to her, and asks a dangerous question: “Does my bomb look big in this?”

For some reason, things seemed to want to come in threes. It seemed fairly natural, so I let it. And okay, it’s maybe not in the best of tastes, but I don’t pretend to be PC. Enjoy!

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  1. Thylonicus says:


    It’s not an in-joke, REALLY… >_>

    March 17th, 2010 at 2:59 pm

  2. Mel says:

    For the other readers of this post: that was another version of a ‘panicked flashing’.

    Hee hee hee. 😀

    March 17th, 2010 at 3:01 pm

  3. Rissa Watkins says:

    I loved this!

    March 19th, 2010 at 8:08 am

  4. Mel says:

    Yay! Thanks, Rissa. 😀

    March 19th, 2010 at 9:49 am